Edit this critique according to the picture of the outline given. There needs to be a thesis statement at the end of the introduction, a second element critiqued (such as tone of the article) because credibility, accuracy, and adequacy are seen as one. The elements can be found in the powerpoint attached. Also, the personal response (the highlighted part) needs to be completely changed according to the outline as the one is written in the essay is completely wrong. Thank you!
The writer has complete control and can delete or add anything to the paper as long as it doesn’t go below 5 pages (excluding the cover and reference page)
This is the article being critiqued: